helloshoe (![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif){kind=small} helloshoe) wrote in murderouslowlow, |
Gently running her hair through the young boy's hair, Unohana-Taicho weakly smiled.
Amusing as this image is, I assume you mean hand :p But this chapter flowed with much fewer hitches, way to go :D
Too keep up the concrit, I think you ought to decide on a set way to handle the honorifics. Either always hyphenate or never do. The Japanese way to write it can't really be converted properly, but at least be consistent. I tend to prefer Surname-taichou, as it goes along with how more common honorifics like -san and -kun are usually written, but that's a matter of preference. You did have Unohana refer to herself as -san, though, and that's never right.
I complain because I care :P
Amusing as this image is, I assume you mean hand :p But this chapter flowed with much fewer hitches, way to go :D
Too keep up the concrit, I think you ought to decide on a set way to handle the honorifics. Either always hyphenate or never do. The Japanese way to write it can't really be converted properly, but at least be consistent. I tend to prefer Surname-taichou, as it goes along with how more common honorifics like -san and -kun are usually written, but that's a matter of preference. You did have Unohana refer to herself as -san, though, and that's never right.
I complain because I care :P
